Job Application Email to Employer


To: drakmitra@guptamail.com

Respected Dr. A. K. Mitra,

I am sending this email to you in response to the post in monster.com dated 5th November, 2010. I found that your organization Mitra Pharmaceuticals is recruiting Nutritionists.

I understand that this is a very challenging job which encompasses tabulating data and creating diet chart with accuracy and precision. Since, perfecting and delivering a drug would depend upon nutritionists in some portions too, I would give my best to this company.

I have completed my honours in Nutrition in 2009 from M. A. College. While in college, I had participated in various workshops. I had also undergone training in two organizations- A. P. C. College and Calicut University. I firmly believe that I would be able make the most of my skills if I join your company.

I would be really appreciative if you would contact me regarding this job. Please find my attached resume with this email.

Thanking you,

Smita Narayan.

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  1. Oliver Smith says:

    This is a terrible example to show people, no wonder people are not getting work. My reasons why this whole cover letter is bad is as follows:
    1. You would not start a letter to someone you have never met or had contact with with the word respected. It should either start Dear, Hello or just the recievers name.

    2. The first paragraph is actually ok but not brilliant. Instead of saying I found, he could have said I heard which gives the impression that he has a social circle because someone told him about it. However maybe that is just me being nitpicky.

    3. He says “I understand that this is a very challenging job which encompasses tabulating data and creating diet chart with accuracy and precision. ”
    He could have just said
    “I have experience with tabulating data and as a perfectionist, can produce diet charts with accuracy and precision.”
    Which would give the impression he knows what he is doing, won’t find the role too challenging as suggested in his statement so doesn’t really require any training which saves companies £1000′s.
    Also the whole kissass attitude of I would give my best to this company. Well obviously you would give your best in any job that is paying your wages.

    4. Bad English. I had participated could just be I participated.
    I had also undergone training in two organizations. It could just be
    I underwent training in two organizations.

    5. I firmly believe that I would be able make the most of my skills if I join your company.

    I would be really appreciative if you would contact me regarding this job. Please find my attached resume with this email.

    Thanking you,

    Smita Narayan.

    First of all making the most of your skills, what are the skills? The writer does not mention having any skills just that “if” taken on he will be able to make the most of them. Is he a champion nail biter? If you hire him, is he going to use his skill of sitting and biting his nails all day and he can make the most of it as his wife won’t let him do it at home. You never know.

    Saying if you take me on, if I can.. It is a sign of weakness. Never say if say when. Act as if they are begging you to work for them so you can be a little cocky, act like he has asked you to be on the board of directors and he needs your help to improve the business, then write.
    So instead of saying “I firmly believe that I would be able make the most of my skills if I join your company.

    I would be really appreciative if you would contact me regarding this job. Please find my attached resume with this email.”

    Be cocky and direct but not arrogant, say something like
    Get in touch when you are ready for me to demonstrate how I can help you take your company forward. My contact details are included within my attached CV.

    Thanking yous very verys muches
    The one and only repected Smita Narayan.

    You get the idea, now get writing.

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